Post by Travis Dawson on Dec 26, 2020 20:37:05 GMT
RAIN CORVIN -vs- MITCHELL MOUNCE
Rain Corvin
Rain Corvin
Match Relevance
(How often did you mention the match, whether in dialogue or in scene?)
[ ] 1 - little to none
[ ] 2 - a few mentions
[ ] 3 - good, or maybe only in 1 segment of the RP
[ ] 4 - solid, scattered throughout the RP
[x] 5 - great, a solid amount, with high quality
Character Development
(How much character development did you pack into your latest RP? Did we learn anything new about your character?)
[ ] 1 - reactionary RP or lacked any character development at all
[ ] 2 - fair amount
[ ] 3 - good amount, equally balanced with match relevance
[x] 4 - solid, important
[ ] 5 - crucial, we learned something major about the character
Flow
(How smoothly did your RP flow? How easy to read was your RP in terms of flashbacks, character and scene transitions? Was it all over the place or was it a straight-forward read?)
[ ] 1 - there really were no transitions, not much going on in the RP
[ ] 2 - hard to follow
[ ] 3 - good
[x] 4 - solid
[ ] 5 - great
Selling Results
(Did you mention what happened during the past show/sell any gashes or injuries?)
(Newcomers get an automatic 'bye' / 5 score here)
[ ] 1 - no
[ ] 2 - yes, a fair amount
[ ] 3 - good
[ ] 4 - solid job
[x] 5 - great, the character sold injuries, interviews, match outcomes, and maybe even certain moves in which their characters were used or mentioned to productively further stories along
Grammar
(How was the writer's grammar/punctuation/use of words?)
[ ] 1 - do you English, though?
[ ] 2 - fair, not necessarily bad
[ ] 3 - good, maybe still a little hard to read
[x] 4 - solid, maybe a couple of errors here and there
[ ] 5 - great, incredibly easy to read, no huge standout errors
For Championship Matches Only:
(Was capturing the title/defending the title a priority for the character?)
[ ] 1 - mentioned very little or not at all
[ ] 2 - mentioned it, in the context that one is at stake in the match
[ ] 3 - good, could've been better
[ ] 4 - solid
[ ] 5 - great, we can tell it means something to the character
Creativity / Overall Quality
(The most important category. Factors may include and are not limited to: realism, making great use of location, being very descriptive, drawing emotion out of the reader whether it be sorrow, comedy, or suspense, finding ways to not only trash talk your opponents but others on the roster, doing your research, bringing up your opponent's past, discussing your character's future in depth as it pertains to both in-ring and what your character has going on outside of the ring, and continuity (because we are all, after all, telling a story.. portions at a time!), incorporating real life current events, etc.)
[ ] 1 - not the most imaginative
[ ] 2 - could use improvement
[ ] 3 - good
[ ] 4 - better
[x] 5 - solid
[ ] 6 - great, very impressive
[ ] 7 - top 5 RP caliber
[ ] 8 - RP of the week caliber
[ ] 9 - the existence of this RP was crucial, not only for your character but to the fed as well
[ ] 10 - RP of the year caliber, this point is meant to be damn near impossible to achieve
Score out of 35: 27 of 35
Comments: There wasn't too much going on here, scene wise. If there's anything major I could critique about your writing, it would be that, SOLELY! It'd be interesting to see people interacting with a rugged, badass looking 19 year old with an eye patch. Or seeing him go about his day to day outside of the squared circle. Also, just like last week, there were a few times when things got repetitive during the bits of dialogue. Other than that, this RP was a strong contender for best Rain Corvin RP ; the best being the one you wrote against Kasey Kash. I think you really took the critiques from last week and you absolutely improved! You sold the results beautifully here, and you made the match relevance top priority as well. You called out several different people, even making way for a potential Rain Corvin-Brandon Moore feud at some point. A positive step in the right direction, and you continue to impress us, man! Keep it up! -Joseph
Mitchell Mounce
Match Relevance
(How often did you mention the match, whether in dialogue or in scene?)
[ ] 1 - little to none
[ ] 2 - a few mentions
[x] 3 - good, or maybe only in 1 segment of the RP
[ ] 4 - solid, scattered throughout the RP
[ ] 5 - great, a solid amount, with high quality
Character Development
(How much character development did you pack into your latest RP? Did we learn anything new about your character?)
[ ] 1 - reactionary RP or lacked any character development at all
[ ] 2 - fair amount
[ ] 3 - good amount, equally balanced with match relevance
[x] 4 - solid, important
[ ] 5 - crucial, we learned something major about the character
Flow
(How smoothly did your RP flow? How easy to read was your RP in terms of flashbacks, character and scene transitions? Was it all over the place or was it a straight-forward read?)
[ ] 1 - there really were no transitions, not much going on in the RP
[ ] 2 - hard to follow
[ ] 3 - good
[ ] 4 - solid
[x] 5 - great
Selling Results
(Did you mention what happened during the past show/sell any gashes or injuries?)
(Newcomers get an automatic 'bye' / 5 score here)
[ ] 1 - no
[ ] 2 - yes, a fair amount
[ ] 3 - good
[ ] 4 - solid job
[x] 5 - great, the character sold injuries, interviews, match outcomes, and maybe even certain moves in which their characters were used or mentioned to productively further stories along
Grammar
(How was the writer's grammar/punctuation/use of words?)
[ ] 1 - do you English, though?
[ ] 2 - fair, not necessarily bad
[ ] 3 - good, maybe still a little hard to read
[ ] 4 - solid, maybe a couple of errors here and there
[x] 5 - great, incredibly easy to read, no huge standout errors
For Championship Matches Only:
(Was capturing the title/defending the title a priority for the character?)
[ ] 1 - mentioned very little or not at all
[ ] 2 - mentioned it, in the context that one is at stake in the match
[ ] 3 - good, could've been better
[ ] 4 - solid
[ ] 5 - great, we can tell it means something to the character
Creativity / Overall Quality
(The most important category. Factors may include and are not limited to: realism, making great use of location, being very descriptive, drawing emotion out of the reader whether it be sorrow, comedy, or suspense, finding ways to not only trash talk your opponents but others on the roster, doing your research, bringing up your opponent's past, discussing your character's future in depth as it pertains to both in-ring and what your character has going on outside of the ring, and continuity (because we are all, after all, telling a story.. portions at a time!), incorporating real life current events, etc.)
[ ] 1 - not the most imaginative
[ ] 2 - could use improvement
[ ] 3 - good
[ ] 4 - better
[ ] 5 - solid
[ ] 6 - great, very impressive
[x] 7 - top 5 RP caliber
[ ] 8 - RP of the week caliber
[ ] 9 - the existence of this RP was crucial, not only for your character but to the fed as well
[ ] 10 - RP of the year caliber, this point is meant to be damn near impossible to achieve
Score out of 35: 29 of 35
Comments: To say, in the kindest of ways, that I wasn't expecting THIS.. would be the understatement of the century. This RP seriously ROCKED. I love the way Mitchell watches out for these teenagers, but also comes across as creepy in his own right, almost taking complete ownership of them for himself while preaching morality. I loved the selling of Rain Corvin's loss in the middle of the RP way before you ever started talking about him. I also loved how in both instances where Mitchell encountered the "bad" guys, Fade 2 Black's Thankless Intent PPV was being played. It gave Mitchell's mission some purpose: he wants to rid pro-wrestling of the stigmas. And Jesus, did this RP make me laugh!!! This was an all around great introductory RP, and I can't wait to see where you go with the character from here! -Joseph
MATCH TOTAL: 56 of 70