Post by Travis Dawson on Jan 17, 2021 16:39:06 GMT
Alex Scott -vs- Miss Michelle
Alex Scott
Alex Scott
Match Relevance
(How often did you mention the match, whether in dialogue or in scene?)
[ ] 1 - little to none
[ ] 2 - a few mentions
[ ] 3 - good, or maybe only in 1 segment of the RP
[ ] 4 - solid, scattered throughout the RP
[x] 5 - great, a solid amount, with high quality
Character Development
(How much character development did you pack into your latest RP? Did we learn anything new about your character?)
[x] 1 - reactionary RP or lacked any character development at all
[ ] 2 - fair amount
[ ] 3 - good amount, equally balanced with match relevance
[ ] 4 - solid, important
[ ] 5 - crucial, we learned something major about the character
Flow
(How smoothly did your RP flow? How easy to read was your RP in terms of flashbacks, character and scene transitions? Was it all over the place or was it a straight-forward read?)
[x] 1 - there really were no transitions, not much going on in the RP
[ ] 2 - hard to follow
[ ] 3 - good
[ ] 4 - solid
[ ] 5 - great
Selling Results
(Did you mention what happened during the past show/sell any gashes or injuries?)
(Newcomers get an automatic 'bye' / 5 score here)
[ ] 1 - no
[x] 2 - yes, a fair amount
[ ] 3 - good
[ ] 4 - solid job
[ ] 5 - great, the character sold injuries, interviews, match outcomes, and maybe even certain moves in which their characters were used or mentioned to productively further stories along
Grammar
(How was the writer's grammar/punctuation/use of words?)
[ ] 1 - do you English, though?
[ ] 2 - fair, not necessarily bad
[x] 3 - good, maybe still a little hard to read
[ ] 4 - solid, maybe a couple of errors here and there
[ ] 5 - great, incredibly easy to read, no huge standout errors
Creativity / Overall Quality
(The most important category. Factors may include and are not limited to: realism, making great use of location, being very descriptive, drawing emotion out of the reader whether it be sorrow, comedy, or suspense, finding ways to not only trash talk your opponents but others on the roster, doing your research, bringing up your opponent's past, discussing your character's future in depth as it pertains to both in-ring and what your character has going on outside of the ring, and continuity (because we are all, after all, telling a story.. portions at a time!), incorporating real life current events, etc.)
[ ] 1 - not the most imaginative
[x] 2 - could use improvement
[ ] 3 - good
[ ] 4 - better
[ ] 5 - solid
[ ] 6 - great, very impressive
[ ] 7 - top 5 RP caliber
[ ] 8 - RP of the week caliber
[ ] 9 - the existence of this RP was crucial, not only for your character but to the fed as well
[ ] 10 - RP of the year caliber, this point is meant to be damn near impossible to achieve
Score out of 35: 14 of 35
Final Thoughts; Please, take all of this as constructive criticism. First of all, there isn’t much happening in the Roleplay. There’s really no creativity behind it, and absolutely no character development. WHO is Alex? Where did he come from? Why is he here? Things like that. I like that you included mentions of his last match, and even the first loss. Then, it went into talking about Michelle this week. I don’t have an issue with that. But, that’s all this Roleplay was. I know lots of old feds or other feds like just a shoot about the match, but putting creativity into it is a big part here. I think you’re capable, I’d just work a little more on adding that in. Ask for tips, by all means. We want to see you succeed. Keep working at it! -Chris
Miss Michelle
Match Relevance
(How often did you mention the match, whether in dialogue or in scene?)
[ ] 1 - little to none
[ ] 2 - a few mentions
[ ] 3 - good, or maybe only in 1 segment of the RP
[ ] 4 - solid, scattered throughout the RP
[x] 5 - great, a solid amount, with high quality
Character Development
(How much character development did you pack into your latest RP? Did we learn anything new about your character?)
[ ] 1 - reactionary RP or lacked any character development at all
[ ] 2 - fair amount
[x] 3 - good amount, equally balanced with match relevance
[ ] 4 - solid, important
[ ] 5 - crucial, we learned something major about the character
Flow
(How smoothly did your RP flow? How easy to read was your RP in terms of flashbacks, character and scene transitions? Was it all over the place or was it a straight-forward read?)
[ ] 1 - there really were no transitions, not much going on in the RP
[ ] 2 - hard to follow
[ ] 3 - good
[x] 4 - solid
[ ] 5 - great
Selling Results
(Did you mention what happened during the past show/sell any gashes or injuries?)
(Newcomers get an automatic 'bye' / 5 score here)
[ ] 1 - no
[ ] 2 - yes, a fair amount
[ ] 3 - good
[x] 4 - solid job
[ ] 5 - great, the character sold injuries, interviews, match outcomes, and maybe even certain moves in which their characters were used or mentioned to productively further stories along
Grammar
(How was the writer's grammar/punctuation/use of words?)
[ ] 1 - do you English, though?
[ ] 2 - fair, not necessarily bad
[ ] 3 - good, maybe still a little hard to read
[x] 4 - solid, maybe a couple of errors here and there
[ ] 5 - great, incredibly easy to read, no huge standout errors
Creativity / Overall Quality
(The most important category. Factors may include and are not limited to: realism, making great use of location, being very descriptive, drawing emotion out of the reader whether it be sorrow, comedy, or suspense, finding ways to not only trash talk your opponents but others on the roster, doing your research, bringing up your opponent's past, discussing your character's future in depth as it pertains to both in-ring and what your character has going on outside of the ring, and continuity (because we are all, after all, telling a story.. portions at a time!), incorporating real life current events, etc.)
[ ] 1 - not the most imaginative
[ ] 2 - could use improvement
[ ] 3 - good
[ ] 4 - better
[x] 5 - solid
[ ] 6 - great, very impressive
[ ] 7 - top 5 RP caliber
[ ] 8 - RP of the week caliber
[ ] 9 - the existence of this RP was crucial, not only for your character but to the fed as well
[ ] 10 - RP of the year caliber, this point is meant to be damn near impossible to achieve
Score out of 35: 25 of 35
Final Thoughts; Solid job here. Really enjoyed the opening with the bit about the monsters. I’d love to see you build on that moving forward. The RP was solid but I do feel it could’ve been more. I’m not sure if there was a less of a desire based on the opponent or not, but I really felt this could’ve been great if it didn’t seem like you mailed it in with the speech portion. Nonetheless, solid job and hope to see you build more going forward. -Chris
MATCH TOTAL: 39 of 70